tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4039445774186145767.post8455279731756895636..comments2023-10-20T08:28:27.175-07:00Comments on Writerquake: Poetics: I understoodLydiahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11135393270656573516noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4039445774186145767.post-62004524072656351552012-08-09T01:25:31.171-07:002012-08-09T01:25:31.171-07:00mythopolis~ I love the last line in your comments....mythopolis~ I love the last line in your comments. It is so true. Thanks for saying you felt the "heartfeltness" of this piece. I must say that it actually was the very form itself that seemed to tap the memory. <br /><br />Riyadh~ You are such a supporter of mine, dear Nephew. People must read our comments and wonder about our relationship. It is wondrous indeed that we have chosen one another as family, and that we met via blogging! <br />I will come over to see what you have done with your post. ♥Lydiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11135393270656573516noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4039445774186145767.post-4902125372095660872012-08-08T17:36:25.790-07:002012-08-08T17:36:25.790-07:00Stole the line... "I was ageless, I was nine&...Stole the line... "I was ageless, I was nine" to start my new post! :)Someone with a tea cuphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10739727766054997424noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4039445774186145767.post-36185049251349566422012-08-08T16:24:29.135-07:002012-08-08T16:24:29.135-07:00A wonderfully written poetry Aunt! The composition...A wonderfully written poetry Aunt! The composition is excellent! And I felt like I was witnessing the journey while reading it! Some very much catchy lines... And the whole thing is just wonderful! <br />You are my talented Aunt! :)<br />♥♥♥Someone with a tea cuphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10739727766054997424noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4039445774186145767.post-51550852022128186742012-08-07T10:37:48.789-07:002012-08-07T10:37:48.789-07:00Well, I certainly like it. I am not so interested...Well, I certainly like it. I am not so interested in the formal construction so much as the heartfeltness of what is said. That edge you describe where maybe you are ageless and nine, maybe not....growing pains, innocence and its loss, etc. So much is gained in growing up, and so much lost.mythopolishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03164758700393086005noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4039445774186145767.post-71328010078390300002012-08-06T18:19:16.257-07:002012-08-06T18:19:16.257-07:00SG~ Thank you for saying it is beautiful.
Fireblo...SG~ Thank you for saying it is beautiful.<br /><br />Fireblossom~ Well, I am a fan of your poetry, most definitely, and also of your comments, which I enjoyed and appreciated.<br /><br />Claudia~ Thank you for feeling the moment between stillness and the storm!<br /><br />kj~ Exactly; still are but are not that nine-year-old. I know you are paying attention to those messages you are getting. Lucky you.<br /><br />Brian~ "Grow up quick..." Yes, there is definitely that. Thank you for commenting on the contradiction, too.<br /><br />flipside records~ Thank you for your appreciation and comments. I was fascinated by your final paragraph and your interpretation, which delighted me because it is a personal thing that I did not intend in this but see how you could read it that way. <br /><br />Amber Lee~ Hi there.<br /><br />hedgewitch~ I can hardly wait to read your pantoum for OLN. We definitely share in love for this form. It was my first attempt and I found great flow in the process. Am anxious to try it again, and will do so after having received your encouraging words.<br /><br />Rob-bear~ Another marvelous poem from you in response to mine. Thank you.<br /><br />susan~ Thank you. It was a wonderfully haunting storm!<br /><br />ds~ Many thanks. Now that you mention the pantoum being a good vehicle for writing about the past you have intrigued me in trying it on another type of topic.<br /><br />izzy~ I am so thankful you think so.<br /><br />Pixies~ I want to read yours....unless it is still wandering out there somewhere!<br /><br />Pitsit sekaisin~ Oh, thank you so much!Lydiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11135393270656573516noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4039445774186145767.post-83272950172149474042012-08-06T14:19:32.665-07:002012-08-06T14:19:32.665-07:00Loved the poem...:)Loved the poem...:)Pitsit sekaisinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16934106182840110254noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4039445774186145767.post-86558850883224406832012-08-06T07:34:24.899-07:002012-08-06T07:34:24.899-07:00Pantoums are a very tricky beast - i had a go once...Pantoums are a very tricky beast - i had a go once and nearly got away with it.<br /><br />Yours works perfectlyDon't Feed The Pixieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05380146661526476947noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4039445774186145767.post-74980542291640445352012-08-06T04:58:33.830-07:002012-08-06T04:58:33.830-07:00You did a fabulous job with the form and content! ...You did a fabulous job with the form and content! Bravo.izzyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06379007428464069723noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4039445774186145767.post-72597571605226237812012-08-05T19:22:19.760-07:002012-08-05T19:22:19.760-07:00Lydia, this is wonderful, and the pantoum is the p...Lydia, this is wonderful, and the pantoum is the perfect form for evoking the wistfulness of a past time. So much that is beautiful here. Thank you!dshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07616750784052488695noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4039445774186145767.post-55610787435074559192012-08-05T18:34:10.669-07:002012-08-05T18:34:10.669-07:00That was a wonderfully haunting piece.That was a wonderfully haunting piece.susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16747450215034568033noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4039445774186145767.post-82210604060105878112012-08-05T12:56:31.553-07:002012-08-05T12:56:31.553-07:00Intriguing thoughts shared in the process of maste...Intriguing thoughts shared in the process of mastering the form. <br /><br />Between the words<br />and the form,<br />lies the mystery. <br /><br />Blessings and Bear hugs.Rob-bearhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00171692478879522588noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4039445774186145767.post-31912681689370061252012-08-05T11:18:30.470-07:002012-08-05T11:18:30.470-07:00Being a sucker for rhyme and the power of singsong...Being a sucker for rhyme and the power of singsong, the pantoum is a favorite of mine, but it's easy to spoil one with even one weak couplet, because then the repetition works against you and derails things. You did great here at avoiding that pitfall, and created a spellbinding set of images--the foreign from the familiar, the real out of the fantasy. Beginning ans ending both are exceptionally strong and mesh perfectly. (And better late than never, eh? I finally got around to writing mine last night and hope to have it up for OLN.)hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4039445774186145767.post-6920087902584687892012-08-05T11:16:52.276-07:002012-08-05T11:16:52.276-07:00Just, wow.Just, wow.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4039445774186145767.post-13615292948905391482012-08-05T10:21:22.587-07:002012-08-05T10:21:22.587-07:00"I was ageless, I was nine" ... Wow, you..."I was ageless, I was nine" ... Wow, you really got my attention here.<br /><br />And your ending! My goodness. Very powerful:<br /><br />"I was not nine afterall<br />Between stillness and the storm"<br /><br />I love the vagueness in this. We have all experienced some type of childhood trauma that made us feel suddenly adult and yet still child. A betrayal, loss, abuse. And a storm is always a great metaphor for unstable circumstances. Very good work.flipside recordshttp://flipsiderecords.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4039445774186145767.post-58494509727104448712012-08-05T08:40:32.457-07:002012-08-05T08:40:32.457-07:00nice...you did well with the form...and the repeti...nice...you did well with the form...and the repetition did just what it should in a pantoum which is build the tension or message...i love the line i was ageless, i was nine....it is a nice contradiction intentionally which opens it up...metaphorically those storms that change our lives, makes us grow up rather quick...that is where this took me...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4039445774186145767.post-31513300837969155742012-08-05T07:54:16.155-07:002012-08-05T07:54:16.155-07:00lydia, i am so impressed and i learn so much that ...lydia, i am so impressed and i learn so much that you tackle these poetic forms. <br /><br />the repetition in this poem is just lovely, sad lovely,<br /><br />I was not nine afterall<br />Between stillness and the storm<br /><br />i keep getting messages about perception and reality, time and maybe not time. i keep thinking that who i was when i was nine is still who i am today, which actually,, i think is true...but not true too.<br /><br />best wishes, my friend<br />xoxo<br />kjkjhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15122196887043345981noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4039445774186145767.post-30371640997623083242012-08-05T07:48:56.099-07:002012-08-05T07:48:56.099-07:00nice..another pantoum... and just love how you cap...nice..another pantoum... and just love how you capture the sensation, the being touched, standing between the stillness and storm, the scents, how something familiar changes suddenly with the different light of an approaching storm...loved itClaudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4039445774186145767.post-77672988813936449262012-08-05T06:47:05.173-07:002012-08-05T06:47:05.173-07:00I'm not a fan of the pantoum. Imho, it causes ...I'm not a fan of the pantoum. Imho, it causes a repitition that I don't care for (as opposed to the shrewdly chosen rep, which I love), and they seem to me to meander. Maybe that's the point. If so, that's me, on to something else.<br /><br />BUT, I am a fan, as you know, of your poetry, so I read on. Lord Kitchener, I presume? As the song said, "we have all been here before." I thought your final two stanzas were really strong, but then, you are The Queen Of Fine Endings, aren't you? Go ahead, girl, strut...Fireblossomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4039445774186145767.post-30770435039346426022012-08-05T05:52:58.777-07:002012-08-05T05:52:58.777-07:00Ah, beautiful! Nostalgia, memories. A very effort ...Ah, beautiful! Nostalgia, memories. A very effort on the prompt.SGhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07439071211238467709noreply@blogger.com