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Friday, September 11, 2015

Mag 284 — Sunset Pantoum


I want to wander there now
In the land split by the hills
Where sunset colors the valley
And gloaming shades the mounds

In the land split by the hills
Days live long in the mossy fields
And gloaming shades the mounds
As night comes in layers of beauty

Days live long in the mossy fields
Youth takes for granted the sun
As night comes in layers of beauty
Age sees and remembers it all

Youth takes for granted the sun
And the moon, the stars, and youth
Age sees and remembers it all
As sighs turn to smiles of knowing

And the moon, the stars, and youth
Then focus over the misty crest
As sighs turn to smiles of knowing
Open the gate to the beckoning path

Then focus over the misty crest
Back to the shining valley below
Open the gate to the beckoning path
I want to wander there now.


Written for The Mag: Mag 284 that inspired with the above image (it seemed like a visual pantoum to me, thus the poetic form I used).


6 comments:

  1. interesting poem and equally interesting pattern :)

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  2. The phrasing is wonderful and the sentiment is one I'm in complete agreement with.
    All the best, my friend. I hope your are well.

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  3. I enjoyed your poem. You used the prompt well.

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    1. @kold_kadavr_flatliner - Many thanks!

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