Let's shampoo in this sink, I said.
After napping on a gracious bed
(used the comforter as a spread —
left the room wearing not a thread).
We entered a bath where stress was shed.
The space was hewn gray stone, wood red:
Wabi-sabi imperfection purebred.
When shadows nudged light fled —
Then shadows on stillness fed.
Written for Friday Flash 55 - My post in exactly 55 words - for the G-Man.
More on Wabi-sabi here.
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11 comments:
between a nap...and bath...i would not mind a little of that pampering today myself....smiles.
Kudos for incorporating Wabi-sabi into this piece. It's a 'beauty' concept of which more people should become aware.
I love the rhyme and concept- will have to investigate further! thanks-
Very evocative, Lydia. the repeated single rhyme is used gracefully and never gets old, and the cadence lulls and comforts, along with the clear and detailed imagery.
I love rhyme AND a story!
You've given the proper balance of both.
Exquisite writing Lydia, thanks for this stellor effort.
Loved your "imperfect" 55
Always a class act My friend.
Have a Kick Ass Week-End
True beauty lies in imperfection ... love this Lydia!!
Sexy poem, from the first perfect line that raises the expectations to the last that sets us down easy.
I want a bath like that. And the picture you chose complements the poem so nicely. Love it, Lydia!
Brian~ No kidding. I wouldn't mind that either. :)
Eric~ Many thanks. I agree; wabi-sabi is uniquely beautiful.
izzy~ Thank you for your interest.
hedgewitch~ Oh, how a comment from you can make my day...
G-Man~ You are our Star of Hosts, most definitely. Thanks, ever so.
Helen~ Yes, it does. I thank you.
Yvonne~ You are so kind. Thank you for your appreciation of this one.
Lydia- lovely words for a lovely time.
Usually, poetry gives me stress because I am trying to find the deeper hidden meaning behind everything. It gets to the point where it is not enjoyable because I subconsciously will not allow it to be.
But THIS was beautiful and spoke right at me!
Kathe~ Many thanks.
brandi~ I am honored that this spoke right at you. Thank you so much for letting me know.
Lester~ What a delight to find your comment. I appreciate it and your visits so much.
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