Monday, August 29, 2011

Mag 80 -- red umbrella

Oh, I loved you, baby, in that
hot August rain — you native
in my city of exile — you son
of its crumbling, smelly alleys,
and rich cathedrals of sadness.
I was your wet lover —
splashing by the cafe awning —
waiting for you to meet me
with your red umbrella.

Oh, you loved me, baby, in that
hot August rain — you creative
neon light artist  — the one
witness to my resident dreams
and to my expatriate madness.
You came bringing me cover —
dashing in the brightening night —
a gift in your other hand,
my own red umbrella.

        MLydiaM ~ August 2011

Visit Magpie Tales to read other Mag 80s inspired by the photo prompt above, Red Umbrella by Christopher Shay.



Friko said...

I enjoyed this tremendously, passion, silliness, nostalgia and a pair of lovers with red umbrellas; an excellent response to the prompt.

Mary said...

Seems like it will be a pretty soggy rendezvous! Nice write.

Di said...

Love this! Found it exquisite! Had to share it on facebook because I found it so exquisite.

izzy said...

Wow I like this ! A great take- Thanks.

mythopolis said...

This writing conjures up such rich images and feelings, and the photo compliments these well!!

Brian Miller said... this much...great textures to the description and the passion as well...the seperate umbrella is almost a bit sad at the end, instead of sharing one...nice mag....

Olga said...

A stunning post. It's been ages since I got to see a red umbrella in real life. Such a thing is so beautiful!

Helen said...

For me? This sizzled!

Paul Andrew Russell said...

This is a nice piece. :-)

Kristen Haskell said...

I enjoyed this tremendously.

Maggie said...

Oh, baby. This was lusty and gorgeous! : )

Doctor FTSE said...

Very accomplished poem. Thank you.

Words A Day said...

Really liked this, my favorite phrase is 'rich cathedrals of sadness' gorgeous

Tess Kincaid said...

Expatriate exotic. Yum.

Lydia said...

Friko~ Thank you so much for your visit and kind comments!

Mary~ Thank you. Hah! your comment really made me laugh.

Di~ Your comment is the kind that can keep my heart happy for days. Many thanks!

izzy~ Thank you for being here and your nice comment.

mythopolis~ I am pleased you liked it. I adored this photo prompt.

Brian~ Your comments help me so much. Thank you for your constructive visits!

Olga~ Lucky you to have actually seen a red umbrella in life! I would like to have one. Here in Oregon it is rather strange the way we do not use umbrellas in the rain. You see the kids walking to school in pouring rain, often without coats. It is a sign of hardiness...or insanity!

kj said...

i find this sensual, lydia. evocative and sensual, right up my alley. you write very well. i so enjoy your poetry. they are stories, snippets.

tsup ♥

Lydia said...

Helen~ Me? Loved your comment!

Paul Andrew Russell~ Thank you for your visit and comment. Nice to meet you. :)

Kristen~ Many thanks. I'll be catching up on more Magpie reading this evening and look forward to yours.

thingy~ Oh, baby, your comment made me smile! :)

Doctor FTSE~ Oh, gosh, your comment meant a lot to me.

Words a Day~ I appreciate knowing which line was your favorite. Thank you kindly. I look forward to reading your Magpie this evening.

Tess Kincaid~ Ah, thank you. And many thanks for this gorgeous image. It introduced me to a marvelous photographer/writer (who happens to harken from Portland OR near where I live).

Reflections said...

The hidden romance of a rainy day... opposites attracting to the glimmers of sunshine.

Rob-bear said...

Oh, Yes! Yes, indeed! So beautiful. Exactement!
I do hope there was a red dress, and red shoes, to go with that red umbrella.

Lydia said...

Reflections~ Thank you for your poetic comment. :)

Rob-bear~ Your comments pleased me, yes they did! Now that you mention it, I do think there was a red dress and red shoes in the scene. It almost seems real when you complete the attire. :)

rel said...



Theresa Milstein said...

I enjoyed your take on the Magpie. Lovers in the rain.

R. Burnett Baker said...

I loved the thrill and hint of a secret lover....could feel the wet air teasing my face as I left the building!

Lydia said...

rel~ I so appreciate your lovely, concise comment!

Theresa Milstein~ Thanks so much for your comment and for the follow! Much appreciated.

R. Burnett Baker~ Your comment made me smile...and feel the atmosphere again myself. :)

Trellissimo said...

I liked this poem a lot. A good idea to balance the verses "him and "her"

ds said...

Wonderful! You truly "saw" the prompt, and made it yours. I love this poem. Thank you.

Phivos Nicolaides said...

Wonderful and inspiring!!!

Lydia said...

Trellissimo~ I am so pleased you liked it and appreciated your comment.

ds~Thank you for loving this poem. :)

Phivos~ Glad you like my little expatriate poem!



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